tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2016855771148413935.post2127645169320552082..comments2023-09-30T02:45:56.254-07:00Comments on Shauna’s Made Up Stuff: Write by Wednesday-- an Updated QueryShaunaKelleyWriteshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/04654367734305011629noreply@blogger.comBlogger1125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2016855771148413935.post-24021793358231817052012-06-07T11:44:18.231-07:002012-06-07T11:44:18.231-07:00Oh Shauna, I feel your PAIN. Query synopses are a ...Oh Shauna, I feel your PAIN. Query synopses are a total bitch, if you'll excuse the French. I ultimately had a friend write mine because I was just too close to the source material.<br /><br />I think what you have here is a good start but could use some more cutting. I think the meat of what makes your premise interesting doesn't start until the second sentence of the second paragraph. I think you should start with that nut of tension: manipulative husband wakes from coma forgetting who he is; roles reverse as the formerly submissive wife becomes manipulative through seizing her opportunity for revenge. <br /><br />Have you ever visited Query Shark? SO helpful.Elly Zupkohttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00504321351871068060noreply@blogger.com